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Passive Voice vs Active Voice

Wed Jan 22, 2014, 1:00 PM


Hello everyone! :wave:

You've probably already read some of this week's wonderful journals on audience and beginning a story, and you're also probably wondering what exciting topic I've brought for you today. I suppose I'll tell you instead of keeping you in the dark.

Passive Voice vs Active Voice


Dean's Leg Guitar


I can see you're all excited.

To begin this article, I'll start by defining exactly what passive and active voice are.


Active Voice


With active voice, the agent (the person or thing carrying out the action) is the subject:

Harry ate six shrimp at dinner.

John opened the door.

Sue changed the flat tire.



Passive Voice


There are two different types of passive voice constructions. In the first one, the agent is identified, but the person (or) thing toward which the action is directed is the subject of the sentence instead:

At dinner, six shrimp were eaten by Harry.

The door was opened by John.

The flat tire was changed by Sue.



In the second type of passive voice construction, the agent is never identified:

Six shrimp were eaten at dinner.

The door was opened.

The flat tire was changed.



Sammy Faints XD


If you're new to this, that might be a lot of information to take in all at once, but no one expects you to be an expert after only knowing information for one day.

There is a common misconception that the words "to be" is a clear indicator, but that isn't always true. Grammar Girl explains this concept quite well, so why should I explain when she's already done it quite brilliantly?

"A lot of people think all sentences that contain a form of the verb “to be” are in passive voice, but that isn't true. For example, the sentence 'I am holding a pen' is in active voice, but it uses the verb “am,” which is a form of “to be.” The passive form of that sentence is 'The pen is being held by me.'

Notice that the subject, the pen, isn't doing anything in that sentence. It's not taking an action; it's passive. One clue that your sentence is passive is that the subject isn't taking a direct action."


HAPPY DANCE


Most writers think that using passive voice is wrong or incorrect. This isn't always so, but it is often a poor way to phrase your sentences. Sometimes, passive voice is awkward and clunky, and other times it's vague and unclear. Sentences written in passive voice are generally wordier than sentences written in active voice, so you can tighten up your writing in many places if you replace passive sentences with active ones.

Politicians use passive voice to intentionally obscure the idea of who is taking the action. Ronald Reagan famously said, “Mistakes were made,” when referring to the Iran-Contra scandal. Other examples of using passive voice for political reasons could include “Bombs were dropped,” and “Shots were fired.” If you watch the news, you should pay attention and listen for examples of passive voice.

There are times when the use of passive voice is encouraged. I'm going to draw on the wisdom of Grammar Girl again here:

"Passive voice is also sometimes useful in fiction writing. For example, if you were writing a mystery novel and you wanted to highlight missing cookies because they are central to the story, passive voice is the best option. It would make more sense to write, "The cookies were stolen," instead of "Somebody stole the cookies."

The difference is subtle, but in the passive sentence “The cookies were stolen,” the focus is on the cookies. In “Somebody stole the cookies,” the focus would be on the unknown somebody. Passive voice can be helpful if you want to create a sense of mystery in your sentence."


Castiel FYI


Discussion Questions


  • How often do you use active voice and how often do you use passive voice?
  • Have you ever chosen to use passive voice instead of active voice? Why?
  • Do you unconsciously use one or the other more often?


Challenge


Go through a recent piece that you have written, or a piece where you use a lot of passive voice, and change it to see if the sentences flow better when you use active voice.

Go through a recent piece that you have written, or a piece where you use a lot of active voice, and change it to see if the sentences flow better when you use passive voice.


I'll leave you with this amazing gif.

Dean AHHHHHHH

Adios! DrippingWords




Passive VS Active:

An epic battle to the death.

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:iconedwardtherese:
A very clear and humorous explanation - great job.
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DrippingWords Feb 9, 2014  Student Writer
Gracias!
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Mightymog Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I tend to use active more than passive
I some times use passive when I want to make an action vague. "The door opened"
I think I unconsciously use active more often but I might see how fluid it is is I change it to passive.

(Also I love the supernatural Gifs, especially the 3rd one)
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DrippingWords Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
I think active is more natural for most people, since that's how we speak.

(Yes, that one is my favorite too.)
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How often do you use active voice and how often do you use passive voice?
...I want to answer, it depends on the story, but that feels like a copout (again). Humorous, fast paced stories tend towards active, angsty things where I don't necessarily want to draw attention to a specific person and have them act tend towards passive. :shrug: 

  • Have you ever chosen to use passive voice instead of active voice? Why?
  • Because rereading/writing it, it sounded better in the passive. :shrug: I'm not a complicated person with grand motivations, okay? :lol: My overwhelming plans tend to be things like making it socially acceptable to bring a blanket fort to class. 

  • Do you unconsciously use one or the other more often?
  • Probably active a little more often, if only because that's how I was taught to write. 
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DrippingWords Jan 29, 2014  Student Writer
Haha, it's not a cop out (that's my answer too.)

:giggle: Blanket forts are the best.

That's what most people have been saying.
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I'm not alone in that answer! :D 

They are! Except they're not acceptable to have in class, for some reason. :grump: I want my blanket fort! 
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DrippingWords Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
:iconcheers2plz:

That's ridiculous! Do it anyway! REVOLT! :giggle:
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I should revolt! :giggle: But then my advisors would probably just laugh at me, and I'd have to be annoying back, and it's too much work.
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DrippingWords Feb 4, 2014  Student Writer
True....:lmao:
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