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have parents that separate
when you’re in high school;
a father filled with unused anger
and a mother too busy to care.

pretend it doesn’t hurt.

let your friends treat you
      like dirt;

      after all,
everything is your fault.

listen to their problems with a fake smile
all the while crying out because
everything hurts and no one can see.

press a knife to your skin,
but be too cowardly to
draw your own blood.

fall in love with people
who could never notice you,
because you’re

                just. not. good.

                enough.

chew on the multicolored
strands of your hair.

      (you can’t stop running
      from who you really are.)

carry around a notebook
and scrawl every thought in it
with unreadable handwriting.

      s
      t
      a
      c
      k

filled notebooks in a corner
      to be forgotten.

expel dust from your lungs as you
breathe in bitterness and regret.

don’t say a word when
your father yells at you,
tells you that you’re
not good enough.

believe him.

grab that knife again.

press

it

to

your

skin.


d                r                a                g.


your soul pouring out
through your wrists.

do it again.
      and again.
             and again.

never stop.

tell yourself that no one
could ever really love you.
                because it’s true.

pick up the shattered fragments
of your heart when you
don’t listen to yourself.

scatter the pieces of your soul
just so you can find them again.

run away from home,
telling yourself that
you’ll never go back
      only
to return weeks later

              because life is harder than it seems.

stare into empty eyes every morning.
curl around yourself, sobbing, in the shower.

sleep whenever you can
because
dreams are so much easier.

stop sleeping
because
dreams turn to nightmares.

and the nightmares
are your reality.

wake up crying
to stifle the tears.
              no one can help.

make a bucket list of things
you’ll never do because
you can’t even make yourself
get out of bed each morning.

let your depression press
the pause button on your life.
      listen.
because it laughs at you
as you watch the world go on

without you.

keep fitting your battle mask on,

      every day,

because without it,
people will see that you care

      too much.


and it hurts.
I'm sorry this is so long, but *intricately-ordinary told me to try, so I did. Blame her. :giggle:
This is a very, very personal poem. I guess it's the truth that I've found so hard to say.
Sorry.

EDIT: Thank you so much to *homunculus888 for suggesting this and to ^star-blazer for featuring this! I never thought I would get a second DD, but I am honored and very excited. :heart:

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Given 2013-11-01
how to become a writer by =DrippingWords is a heart-breakingly beautiful poem that many can relate to, even in differing situations. The emotion is heavy, but fitting, and really hits home, giving this piece its utmost strengths. ( Suggested by homunculus888 and Featured by DorianHarper )
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The style and technique in which you wrote this was pulled off expertly. I loved how the sentences were broken up in segments, it made me imagine someone that was speaking in gasps and trying to grasp at reasons for his existence. The drag bit was done beautifully because the separation of the word gave off the fear of continuing the act but then the next few statements of realization kick in and the fear stops and acceptance washes away any remaining doubt. I felt the next few lines flowed perfectly after the drag bit but felt they were a smidgeon less emotional due to the repetition of the style. However the last line saves us from that repetitious style and hit me emotionally just as hard as the drag bit did.

Your artwork definitely reflects a theme of hurt and depression, thus 5 stars for that.
This type of style doesn't however strike me as new or totally original because I've seen a fair amount of this stuff, thus 3 stars.
The technique was superb and great break from the norm, however repetitiveness in the second half of the poem seemed to lessen the emotional blow a bit, thus 4.5 stars.
This poem hit me hard and hit me right in the feels so for that I give you 5 stars in the impact area.

Overall this is an impressive piece of art. Good Job!
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This free verse is impressive, full of feelings. I agree with the main idea that pain is what makes artists create, and also think that the ability of overtaking pain by writing/drawing/singing it is what helps artists to become adults.

This poem is full of bitterness, and express in a striking way the tragedy of a teenage who feels guilty but shouldn't : he/she isn't guilty at all, this person is maybe emotive, like every artists.

while reading it, I felt that the artist put her heart in it. it seemed too "true".

after reading the description, I knew that was true. this is very difficult to express these feelings and to reveal these kind of events ( that most of people would keep for themselves ) but this is what makes an artist a GOOD artist. He/she expresses something real.
congrats.

However, this is so well done that it ruined my happiness. ;D Lol.
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therianlight Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh.. I'm crying.
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DrippingWords Jan 23, 2014  Student Writer
I'm sorry.
Thank you for reading. :heart:
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kissysaltcoatedangel Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem speaks to me in every level, from the descriptions of the parents, acute and refined to my reality. To friendships, to the ones that are too cowardly to actually slash their wrists. Depression.
..it feels as if you have seen the ache in my chest, the one that I live with every day...

Anyhow, amazing job! :) 
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DrippingWords Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
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Thank you very much, and I'm so sorry that you relate.
:heart: I wish you the best of luck.
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kissysaltcoatedangel Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: You are most welcome :heart: and may the odds be ever in your favor! :iconmockingjayplz: 
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DrippingWords Jan 6, 2014  Student Writer
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IceColdNormal Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

this is so relevant to me;

beautiful.

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DrippingWords Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you.
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flummo Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD. :heart: your strength is admirable.
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DrippingWords Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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