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have parents that separate
when you’re in high school;
a father filled with unused anger
and a mother too busy to care.

pretend it doesn’t hurt.

let your friends treat you
      like dirt;

      after all,
everything is your fault.

listen to their problems with a fake smile
all the while crying out because
everything hurts and no one can see.

press a knife to your skin,
but be too cowardly to
draw your own blood.

fall in love with people
who could never notice you,
because you’re

                just. not. good.

                enough.

chew on the multicolored
strands of your hair.

      (you can’t stop running
      from who you really are.)

carry around a notebook
and scrawl every thought in it
with unreadable handwriting.

      s
      t
      a
      c
      k

filled notebooks in a corner
      to be forgotten.

expel dust from your lungs as you
breathe in bitterness and regret.

don’t say a word when
your father yells at you,
tells you that you’re
not good enough.

believe him.

grab that knife again.

press

it

to

your

skin.


d                r                a                g.


your soul pouring out
through your wrists.

do it again.
      and again.
             and again.

never stop.

tell yourself that no one
could ever really love you.
                because it’s true.

pick up the shattered fragments
of your heart when you
don’t listen to yourself.

scatter the pieces of your soul
just so you can find them again.

run away from home,
telling yourself that
you’ll never go back
      only
to return weeks later

              because life is harder than it seems.

stare into empty eyes every morning.
curl around yourself, sobbing, in the shower.

sleep whenever you can
because
dreams are so much easier.

stop sleeping
because
dreams turn to nightmares.

and the nightmares
are your reality.

wake up crying
to stifle the tears.
              no one can help.

make a bucket list of things
you’ll never do because
you can’t even make yourself
get out of bed each morning.

let your depression press
the pause button on your life.
      listen.
because it laughs at you
as you watch the world go on

without you.

keep fitting your battle mask on,

      every day,

because without it,
people will see that you care

      too much.
I'm sorry this is so long, but *intricately-ordinary told me to try, so I did. Blame her. :giggle:
This is a very, very personal poem. I guess it's the truth that I've found so hard to say.
Sorry.

EDIT: Thank you so much to *homunculus888 for suggesting this and to ^star-blazer for featuring this! I never thought I would get a second DD, but I am honored and very excited. :heart:

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how to become a writer by =DrippingWords is a heart-breakingly beautiful poem that many can relate to, even in differing situations. The emotion is heavy, but fitting, and really hits home, giving this piece its utmost strengths. ( Suggested by homunculus888 and Featured by DorianHarper )
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The style and technique in which you wrote this was pulled off expertly. I loved how the sentences were broken up in segments, it made me imagine someone that was speaking in gasps and trying to grasp at reasons for his existence. The drag bit was done beautifully because the separation of the word gave off the fear of continuing the act but then the next few statements of realization kick in and the fear stops and acceptance washes away any remaining doubt. I felt the next few lines flowed perfectly after the drag bit but felt they were a smidgeon less emotional due to the repetition of the style. However the last line saves us from that repetitious style and hit me emotionally just as hard as the drag bit did.

Your artwork definitely reflects a theme of hurt and depression, thus 5 stars for that.
This type of style doesn't however strike me as new or totally original because I've seen a fair amount of this stuff, thus 3 stars.
The technique was superb and great break from the norm, however repetitiveness in the second half of the poem seemed to lessen the emotional blow a bit, thus 4.5 stars.
This poem hit me hard and hit me right in the feels so for that I give you 5 stars in the impact area.

Overall this is an impressive piece of art. Good Job!
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This free verse is impressive, full of feelings. I agree with the main idea that pain is what makes artists create, and also think that the ability of overtaking pain by writing/drawing/singing it is what helps artists to become adults.

This poem is full of bitterness, and express in a striking way the tragedy of a teenage who feels guilty but shouldn't : he/she isn't guilty at all, this person is maybe emotive, like every artists.

while reading it, I felt that the artist put her heart in it. it seemed too "true".

after reading the description, I knew that was true. this is very difficult to express these feelings and to reveal these kind of events ( that most of people would keep for themselves ) but this is what makes an artist a GOOD artist. He/she expresses something real.
congrats.

However, this is so well done that it ruined my happiness. ;D Lol.
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I-am-Inspired Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you, for writing down what will always be hard to say. for sharing the depths in which you can never truly escape. I wish you all the best in this world, and maybe one day youre happiness will soar xx well done for making it this far  Heart
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you, from the bottom of my heart. I'm glad this spoke to you. :heart:
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I-am-Inspired Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Heart 
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Phantomtigers Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this was amazing, it definitely made me tear up at the end :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you. :huggle:
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When the rest of the world around you fades away, and also so do I,
remember that Jesus loves you anyway, and for you He bled and died.
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Tehya-Ninawi Featured By Owner Edited Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. Just beautiful. The word spacing and separation kind of reminds me of an e.e. cummings poem. Very well done, indeed.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it. :huggle:
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therianlight Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh.. I'm crying.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Student Writer
I'm sorry.
Thank you for reading. :heart:
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem speaks to me in every level, from the descriptions of the parents, acute and refined to my reality. To friendships, to the ones that are too cowardly to actually slash their wrists. Depression.
..it feels as if you have seen the ache in my chest, the one that I live with every day...

Anyhow, amazing job! :) 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
:iconihugyouplz:
Thank you very much, and I'm so sorry that you relate.
:heart: I wish you the best of luck.
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: You are most welcome :heart: and may the odds be ever in your favor! :iconmockingjayplz: 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student Writer
:iconloveluvplz:
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IceColdNormal Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

this is so relevant to me;

beautiful.

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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you.
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flummo Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
Congratulations on the DD. :heart: your strength is admirable.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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Morning-Star-42 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"make a bucket list of things
you’ll never do because
you can’t even make yourself
get out of bed each morning."

It just really helps me to know that I'm not the only one. Thank you for sharing this, I hope things get better/have gotten better. =)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
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They've stayed about the same.
Thanks for reading!
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The-Dragon-Flame Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
Since I do not have the literary skills to express the relation in this, the confindments of this, the depression, the everything that makes this beautiful, I can only show you and Emocon.

For you, :iconclapplz:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Student Writer
:blush::faint:

Thank you so much.

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The-Dragon-Flame Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
:iconihugyouplz:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Student Writer
:iconsupertighthugplz:
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The-Dragon-Flame Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
:tighthug:
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GMfreak64 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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XeonartOmega Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love angst. its like psychic candy to me
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Student Writer
Okay?
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doctorwhooves107 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Artist
i like this but it just makes me feel depressed 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Writer
I'm sorry.
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doctorwhooves107 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Artist
it's okay it's still a good piece of literature 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks.
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doctorwhooves107 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Artist
no prob :)
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Farwood Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well that was depressing. Good but depressing.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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AwkwardDinozaur Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
That was so sad yet so beautiful. I shed tears as I read this.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. And I'm sorry.
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AwkwardDinozaur Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
It's okay 5 seconds hug 
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FullMoonHowler123 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I write Poetry quite a bit and I have to say, this my favorite piece of writing I have ever read, It truly moves me and gives me a new outlook on other people and how they see things,
Thank you for sharing this amazing piece of Literature with the world.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you for reading.
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FullMoonHowler123 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
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FullMoonHowler123 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
:glomp:
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why is this so sad, but so great?
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Student Writer
Because it speaks to you? Different people interpret poetry different ways.
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nickp1211 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.... my heart goes out to you <3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you.
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PantheSkitty Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I can't think of anything else to say. Just... Wow.
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