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February 24, 2013
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32 (who?)
clocks in a motel room;
the years go by like one day
with these old photos in my hands.

how do cities understand?
that by skating on the edge of the world
we carve north stars in Styrofoam
on the edge of reality.

we are all waiting to be found
when stars die.

                (i used to have a name)

now i'm dreaming of the simple things,
and i'm ready to fight my way.
somebody told me:
        "i have loved the stars too fondly."

between gray and gold
there are flaking photographs and shattered memories;
the heartlines of drunken sinners chasing stars.

cold hearted, you bound our spines.
                (and breathe out)

it is not enough to know the colors of my soul,
like a painting hung all wrong, or
and unwanted diary.

dreams catch in the lungs.

        let go, little bird.
                (but don't forget me)

without you, my fickle muse,
the city daydreams,
        desperate to connect with
the world near your feet.

(lost wishes can be found
        in saltwater veins)

but most days,
what once was is
sweet serendipity;
windows in the sky.

i'll remain suspended,
burning up,
an angel without wings.
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Wow, now THIS is one of the best poems I have seen in a while, and I read a lot of them. I really like the word play, you made it seem as though you really are the narrator of this poem.

I think I am going to use the title and write something based off of it, I will try to remember to write a note to you with the link later. (I am not really good at remembering, so I will probably forget. Haha.) :)

Really great job though, you're definitively going to get a favorite from me on this.

I've been wanting to promote some of my favorite writers on Tumblr, and I was wondering if you would be willing to let me post your page link on there? It would be great if I could. :)
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student General Artist

Ah yes lovely as always~

I've become addicted to title poems now.  What should I do?!

DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:

Write one yourself!
Time-Signature Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Ahaha, yes.
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Student Writer
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
For a title poem, this has a great flow. I wouldn't have known it was one until you said it. Very beautifully put together :heart:

PS Is the "and" in "and angel without wings" supposed to be "an"?
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:

Yes. Thanks for reminding me. Haha.
Sakura-no-Josei Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful!
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful, breathtaking and stunning all in one. Loved it.
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like it. :huggle:
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