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the disharmony
of the city is fading
into Nothingness

a cacophony
of sounds being swallowed by
the din of Silence

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Day #3 of the #Glory-Be-Project

Written on January 3rd, 2013

Written for the musical prompt: [link] from *glossolalias :D

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`vespera Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like that you did a pair of haiku - they worked really well together
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=DrippingWords Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. I'm very glad you like it. Did you think that the capitalization of some of the words worked for or against the poem?
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`vespera Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it highlighted nothingness, and while it's not traditional, neither is pairing two haiku together, so it works well as a non-traditional haiku. I'm a fan of modern haiku :D
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=DrippingWords Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
:iconyayzplz: Haha, sweet :D
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~magnacartaelle Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that it is simple and short. And also that you gave 'Nothingness' and 'Silence' a sort of existence, as though they are alive.

*Thumbs up*
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=DrippingWords Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. I'm glad that's the vibe you got, 'cause that's what I was trying to emanate :D

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~magnacartaelle Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Plus the no use of punctuation. Is it that you were trying to show that this is a never ending thing? :X
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=DrippingWords Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, maybe. I just don't like using punctuation very often in my haikus.
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~magnacartaelle Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oooh, I see. Anyway, nice work! :)
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=DrippingWords Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, thanks :huggle:
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