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the disharmony
of the city is fading
into Nothingness

a cacophony
of sounds being swallowed by
the din of Silence
Day #3 of the #Glory-Be-Project

Written on January 3rd, 2013

Written for the musical prompt: [link] from *glossolalias :D
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imaginative-lioness Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am speechless, I absolutely love this piece. :heart:

I have seen a lot of people complain about putting numerous haikus together to create a piece, and I will never understand why they don't like them. Pieces like this are amazing, I love how you can read them together and apart and they still make sense. I love the images you created in this piece, as well. Fantastic job! :heart:

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DrippingWords Jun 20, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Really? Some people don't like sets of two or more haiku's? Huh. That's really strange. I don't understand why, LOL. :huggle: You're too sweet. Thank you again! :heart: :love:
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vespera Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like that you did a pair of haiku - they worked really well together
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DrippingWords Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. I'm very glad you like it. Did you think that the capitalization of some of the words worked for or against the poem?
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vespera Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it highlighted nothingness, and while it's not traditional, neither is pairing two haiku together, so it works well as a non-traditional haiku. I'm a fan of modern haiku :D
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DrippingWords Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
:iconyayzplz: Haha, sweet :D
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magnacartaelle Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that it is simple and short. And also that you gave 'Nothingness' and 'Silence' a sort of existence, as though they are alive.

*Thumbs up*
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DrippingWords Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. I'm glad that's the vibe you got, 'cause that's what I was trying to emanate :D

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magnacartaelle Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Plus the no use of punctuation. Is it that you were trying to show that this is a never ending thing? :X
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DrippingWords Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
Haha, maybe. I just don't like using punctuation very often in my haikus.
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