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i.

every sound
excites a burst
of color; an
exploding
firework,
dancing and
twirling.



ii.

your voice
tastes of mangoes;
sticky
and sweet,
caressing my senses.
your flavor is
personal.



iii.

the letters
all become a
different personality.
"T" is crabby
and "I" worries.
"J" is strong
and mighty.



iv.

closer and
farther away;
each number becomes
its own plane
and point
in space;
perfect details.



v.

all the numbers
form lines
becoming an army
of curvy rows,
swirling round
and round.
a perfect pattern.



vi.

letters take
on colors,
each and every one
a different hue,
a different shade,
forming rainbows
of words.
For :iconrawem0tion: theme: Synesthesia.

For iii, the Personification section, I took actual quotes from people who had that type of Synesthesia.

I used the six known/major types of Synesthesia:

i. Sound → color Synesthesia
ii. Lexical → gustatory Synesthesia
iii. Personification
iv. Spatial Sequence Synesthesia
v. Number form Synesthesia
vi. Grapheme → color Synesthesia

I've always thought it would be really cool to have Synesthesia; to see/taste something that only a few other people could.

Could I have formatted it in a different way to make it better?
Does it flow even though it's free verse?
Can you imagine what's happening?
Any thing else you think could be made better overall?

EDIT:

OMG! I got a DLD! It's been a dream of mine to receive one, and it finally happened! Thanks to those who put so much work into featuring deviations :D Thanks to *Concora for suggesting it, and to =TwilightPoetess for featuring me!

EDIT2:

HOLY CRAP. So I log on today, just expecting the usual amount of comments, maybe around 10 or 11, but there were SO MANY! I was so confused, but then I scroll down to the bottom, and I GOT A DD! My FIRST one! Thank you so much to =wondering-souls, who suggested this piece, and A HUGE THANK YOU to `thorns who featured me :D

EDIT3:

Here's the link to the magazine this poem was published it: I'm on page 42. They did spell Synesthesia wrong, but it's understandable, because of all the work they do. I'm just happy to be included with all the other wonderful authors and artists!

EDIT4:

The wonderful =Sammur-amat read this piece out loud here.

If you like this, check out this amazing picture by *SilentReaper (for #dALinkSystem)
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Given 2012-09-01
To Us- Synesthesia by =DrippingWords ( Suggested by wondering-souls and Featured by thorns )
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1) Personally, I believe that this format works wonderfully. The breaking of sections as to account for all of the senses does the piece justice.

2) Yes, this piece reads well. Thankfully you injected punctuation along with the strong language allowing the piece to move fluidly.

3) In some parts more than others, which I will address next.

4) Personally I believe stanza ii is the weakest of the bunch. The analogy to sugar isn't strong enough for me along with the vividness in the rest of the piece. I'd suggest changing this comparison to something a little more unique than sugar.

I would also suggest removing "a show for me" in the first stanza. You have already stated "only for my eyes" two lines above it and the image would create a stronger impact as an ending. You actually do this in a few places and I think if you were to integrate that into the title it'd make the poem stronger. Every time you state "Only i can see them" or "just for me" it takes me out of the ridiculously well crafted sensory details.

I hope this helped! Great piece of work you've got here.
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blackoutpoet Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Caitlan, awesome poem about synesthesia! As a synesthete myself, I am always pleased when I come across synesthesia-themed literature. :)

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DrippingWords Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you think so; I was worried when I wrote the poem that it wouldn't be accurate, since I don't have synesthesia (unfortunately) but I'm glad I didn't mess up! Haha. :huggle:
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blackoutpoet Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Wait, what? You don't? o.o

May I ask what inspired this piece?

I have it, to be sure, but not all of the forms you described. I associate color with sound/music, print/Braille graphemes, and some touch, smell, taste, and pain. It's pretty nifty!

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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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AdrianMinotaur Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I play music and do research on the meta-physical, and I just find this poem almost(if not) magical. Just saying i , J, or T you can hear the personality you described. I guess I really like the idea that musicians paint tapestries, :D
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DrippingWords Jan 13, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you!
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SPIKE295 Nov 1, 2013  Student General Artist
I read a book about a person with synesthesia... I WANT IT SO BAD.
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DrippingWords Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
I know, right? I hope that sometime in the future, scientists will figure out how to turn on that part of the brain. That would be the only surgery I would get.
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SPIKE295 Nov 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Hah, that would be the coolest thing!! I know I'd get it too :)
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DrippingWords Nov 1, 2013  Student Writer
:D
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