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if this is what love
feels like, kidnap me; poison
my unmarred body.
Day #1 of the #Glory-Be-Project

Written on January 1st, 2013
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This is gorgeous. Despite the obvious use of personal pronouns *your* view is much more obvious in this piece. I think that even without me or my I would have been able to sense that this was your opinion about love, and not a repeating of facts.

I am not crazy about the enjambment of line two to three as it seems too organic for such a rigid form BUT if I ignore where the breaks are it is a beautiful little segment of writing.

It's simple, small, but effective and I very much like that you condensed what could have been a long description down to one word "unmarred". It is a very clever word to use that says a lot in a small syllable count, so its very clever writing.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooooh....wow. I like this.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:clap:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Lovely. :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :huggle:
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