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bravery unmatched,
her honor unparalleled;
she is Joan of Arc.
Day #2 of the #Glory-Be-Project

Written on January 2nd, 2013
For me, this is too factual. It seems like three factual statements, and I don't see any of *you* in it. It is too sterile for my tastes.

I get that its a haiku so it has to be brief, but I feel this is too removed from the poet to offer the reader anything new. These sentences could be from a history book. Where are you here? It doesn't tell me your feelings about her, if she inspires you, it is just facts.

I do like the use of the word unparalleled in a haiku though, got to admit.

I'd quickly review your punctuation as I think a comma and a semi colon will clean this up and mark it as finished.
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